2017年6月17日雅思大作文高分范例

2017-06-21编辑: 长安来自: 环球教育

  2017年6月17日雅思小作文再次出现的地图题团灭部分考生的同时,大作文却是一个多次出现于题库中的老题。该题目分别在08年、16年出现过。这一次,几乎原封不动地再次与大家见面。


  环球教育杨亮老师分析原题如下:

  Some people believe that the country would benefit a lot from a large number of young people entering universities;however, others think that the large amount of people receiving the education of university only leads to graduates‘unemployment.

  审题之后,对于题干中的第二个观点很多考生觉得模棱两可。考生们觉得大学生人数多了,如果就业率没有大幅度上升的情况下,失业的大学生自然就会上升。但是,这是雅思写作,不是数学考试,也不是脑筋急转弯。如此展开和讨论第二个题干中的观点显然有些太过现实了。

  In this present-day society, the prime task of governments in education is being transformed from eliminating illiteracy to popularizing good quality and high-level education all over the world. Both governments and societies are, whereby, beneficiaries, although some objectors are stressing that blind diffusion of university education, without any doubt, results in high unemployment rate of college graduates.

  较为规整的开头段,通过一个背景的引入,点明题干中出现的两个观点。

  The person with superior educational background can be called high-class workforce that is able to contribute greatly to the advancement of societies in both technological and cultural dimensions. Innovation of technology, which is driving economic development and upgrading humans’ life quality across all nations, relies on achievements of scientific researches, and meanwhile high-tech talents are key factors for those researches. Through offering more opportunities for the young to receive university education, societies gain more possibilities to cultivate high-end labor. Similarly, concerning culture, a great number of graduates specializing in humanity is doomed to promote the process of human civilization.

  本段回应题干中的观点一,既年轻人都上大学是不是对国家有益。讨论从两个角度展开,分别是技术方面和文化方面。从两个方面证明了,让更多的年轻人上大学就是可以对国家对社会有益。

  On no account, does direct causality between popularization of university education and high unemployment rate of graduates exist. In macro-perspective, there are fairly many reasons leading to the unemployment of job seekers with university degree, such as economic depression and unstable political situations. Additionally, in specific-perspective, overly high expectation of being employed makes those job seekers reject job offers of entry-level positions. Curriculums, besides, are not carefully or professionally designed, resulting in graduates’ shortage of employability. To change this embarrassing situation completely, what those job hunters really need is supportive policies from governments, employment-oriented curriculums and transition of ideology in terms of employment.

  本段重点讨论题干中的观点二,既年轻人都上大学会导致很多大学毕业生失业。本段从两个角度展开讨论。分别从宏观角度和微观角度来说明大学生的失业与其他因素相关。本段最后一句为一个简要的方案,其实在本文中和需要讨论的问题关系不密切,可以删除。

  As has been analyzed above, popularization of university education is what governments are willing to achieve and what they can obtain benefits from, but simultaneously not what the public can attribute low employment of university graduates to.

  结尾段,用了一个长句,并列的表语,在总结前两个主段的同时也重申了笔者的立场。

  成文仓促,多有不足,有待斧正。

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