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托福独立作文范例(四)

2015-10-20

来源:环球教育整理

小编:Sophie 87
摘要:托福独立作文的备考过程中少不了多看例文,汲取其他人的优点,由此才能看到自身的不足。

   接下来是环球教育为大家总结的一篇托福独立作文范文:

  题目:

  In order to succeed, it’s better for a person to act the same as others rather than behave differently from others.

  题型:比较 论点:让步 角度:具象拆分

  开头:与众不同可以让人成 功(话题引入 +正反方观点 +自我观点及过渡句)

  Success is something that every one of us is drooling over and there are indeed various roads that take us to success, just like an old saying goes, “all road lead to Rome”. Among those roads, there are two that are always talked about: to act exactly like others and to keep different from others. As far as I’m concerned, I prefer to choose the latter path, namely, keeping distinct by following my own heart. Here are two cases in point that can best illustrate my point of view. (89 字)

  中间段 1:苹 果 公 司 ——敢于破坏再创造,颠覆自我,与众不同,口号 “think different”,重新定义和发明手机,引领潮流。

  The first case is famous Apple Inc. As is known to all, Apple is the company that dares to challenge and overturn the old routines by creating something that never exists before. The most renowned catchphrase of the company, “think different”, embodies in its unbelievable products. When other cell——phone manufacturers were engaged in producing classic——designed cell——phones with colorful screen and QWERTY keyboard, Apple had taken steps to differentiate itself by launching a unprecedented product——iPhone. It’s multi——touch technology and no-——keyboard design was soon to draw everybody’s attention, and iPhone sets a new industrial standard. The miraculous achievement of Apple Inc. should be attributed to its keeping different from others. (109 字)

  中间段 2:特 斯 拉 电 动 汽 车 Tesla,超 强 动 力 ,前 沿 设 计 ,颠 覆( overthrow) 传统汽车行业以及人们对电动车的认知。

  Another example is a star enterprise that seems to start a revolution in automobile industry——“Tesla”. “Tesla” is an electric vehicle manufacturer based in California, US. Different from traditional electric car manufacturer, Tesla has adopted an electricity——based engine that delivers remarkable power and its acceleration reaches an unbelievable 5 seconds per 100-meter (much more than that of Golf by Volkswagen). Moreover, a breakthrough in batter technology makes it possible that a full-charged battery can support the car to run constantly for approximately 400 kilometers. The brand new powertrain and the extraordinary driving experience make Tesla a great hit across the United States.(102 字)

  让步:创新也有缺点,比如研发成本很高,造成资源浪费。但是(打压, 次要问题) 跟沿袭旧规、 不思革新相比, 创新的这些缺点是次要问题。 所 以还是要创新,还是要保持与 众不同。

  Admittedly ,keeping different can have one or two downsides. For instance, the cost will be high because everything starts from scratch, and one might go through trials and error at the very beginning. However, high cost and making mistakes are a really minor issue if we take into consideration following the steps of predecessors and being content with the way things are without making any change. Therefore, being different is a must if one wants to be successful.(79 字)

  结尾:重申观点,归纳理由 /升华主题

  Ina nutshell, in order to be successful, one needs to think out of the box and keep different than others. There is a widespread idea that goes, Messi is the successor of Mara Dona in football and Bryant the successor of Jordan in basketball. But in fact, nobody should bear the obligation to be the duplicate of someone else. Only if one chooses his own road, can his predecessor possibly be taken over.

  以上便是环球教育为大家总结的托福独立作文范例了,大家赶快学起来吧!小编在这里预祝大家都能取得一个满意的成绩!


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